08/08/2016 by anrose1017
Your sleepy eyes that glances into mine,
your soft cheeks that wrinkles with your nose,
your lips that kept closed yet speaks up your soul,
and those gentle words that i’ll forever treasure…
nice girl..keep on posting..😍
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I personally find the present active tense really powerful as it creates a sense of immediacy. ‘Your sleepy eyes glace into mine.’ However, if you are using future tense to create a tone of hope for the future, then it is the right tense for this poem 🙂
Thanks for your swift response. 🙂 Yes your right about it. I’m still hoping to see his smile.. LOL.. thanks for the advise 🙂
That breaks my heart, I hope it happens soon!
Nah, I’ve written this poem years ago, right before I found out that this guy was already married. But its ok, it was a long time ago..
A really sweet and hopeful poem.
thank you 🙂
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